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Utah I was worried at first that you'd just tolalty skipped Corey's dramatic arc but was relieved to see you had only incorporated the prompt of a flash-forward, or dream sequence, into the story. I am deeply disturbed by this story and really want to read on, which is a very good sign, I think.
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(VISITOR) AUTHOR'S NAME Sayaka
MESSAGE TIMESTAMP 16 december 2014, 09:00:09
AUTHOR'S IP LOGGED 80.122.237.30
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